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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be usefull in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It’s often argued that undergraduates should be forced to take only courses that will be beneficial
on
Suggestion
in
for
 the long run. While others believe that they should be free to choose whatever they are most interested in.
Although
 science degrees offer better opportunities to procure a good job,
this
 essay will show that forcing someone to do what they are not interested in will often result in failure. On the one hand, students who finish university having studied an area of science are far more likely to find a job. The reason behind
this
 is that industries related to technology are always growing and there is an ever-increasing demand for professionals in
this
 field.
For instance
, Malaysia attracts a lot of foreign companies because of the competence of their science graduates.
This
 essay argues that a person who has found employment easily
is not guaranteed
Suggestion
doesn't guarantee
does not guarantee
 success in their careers.
On the other hand
, a large number of students will fail their exams if they are forced to study certain subjects. It is very difficult for students to attend a class they dislike because they will have no motivation and find it more difficult to grasp the concepts.
For example
, most parents in Jordan force their children to study business-related subjects at university,
however
 it has resulted in
failure rate
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a failure rate
 of nearby one
third
.
Therefore
, I believe that people will be more likely to succeed if they follow their interests. To conclude, science-based subjects should not be made mandatory at
third
-level education because a guarantee of work does not help people to succeed and students will find them too difficult and fail their exams.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • academic excellence
  • contribute uniquely
  • interdisciplinary learning
  • creativity and innovation
  • arts and humanities
  • cultural awareness
  • critical thinking
  • empathy
  • soft skills
  • secure career path
  • job prospects
  • essential future-related subjects
  • steady supply
  • critical and advancing fields
  • allocate resources
  • societal needs
  • future challenges
  • comprehensive educational experience
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