Topic: In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

Teenage years are the most crucial years of human's life. These years play a very important role in either building or destroying
person
's future. In these years parents really need to keep a watch
at
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on
children's activities. They should
also
be vigilant of the gathering of their children.
Although
I agree that there should be restrictions
of
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on
what a teenager can and cannot do in the country, but having a
curfew
in a place like
USA
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the USA
is not a good idea I think. US is a pretty safe country and people in US like to live an independent life. Teenage years are the building blocks of
person
's life. As the
person
is going towards
adulthood these
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adulthood, these
years are the best to explore your talent and
also
to become independent. If you place a
curfew
on
teenagers they
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teenagers, they
will never be truly free and will not be independent.
Instead
of having a
curfew
parents
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parent
should teach their teenage children of good and bad. They should make them responsible and should have confidence in their child.
Moreover if
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Moreover, if
you place a
curfew
on
teenagers they
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teenagers, they
are more likely to engage in inappropriate activities as an adult
for instance
alcohol abuse, drug abuse etc.
This
is because when you restrict a
person
, curiosity tends to increase and
this
curiosity can lead to dangerous outcomes when the
person
is set free. But,
on the other
hand there
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hand, there
should be laws to govern the activities of teenagers
such
as having a minimum age to smoke or to drive and government should
also
restrict teenagers to enter places
such
as bars, clubs
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
without an adult. In a nutshell, it is inappropriate to have a
curfew
on teenagers,
instead
one should set them free to explore and to become
independent but there
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independent, but there
should be laws to regulate their activities and parents and schools should make children responsible enough to abide by these rules.

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