Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that videos, films and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree?

With
advancement
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the advancement
of technology, certain nations think that books should be replaced by digital devices in
school
and all lessons will be
tought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
by that
devices
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device
. In my opinion, that digital tools should be combined with
school
programs, but not replaced dramatically.
Moreover
,
school
teachers can make a plan and
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
them as day of watching TV and
ect
take in solid food
eat
. It is clearly evident, that
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
are
more smarter
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smarter
than elder man,
distinction
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a distinction
between elder generation and
young generation
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the young generation
is
fast learn
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fast, learn
,
hence
teaching method by TV, computer can give a bit advantage. Some lessons
are require
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require
video
such
as history where too much
details
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detail
. Many historical facts can be captured by documentary film and can be presented
for
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to
school
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
for easy
percieve
.
Moreover
, certain countries have found video lessons are more beneficial and have included
to
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in
with
into
on
school program
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the school program
.
Their
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There
have enrolled digital tools as device which support for explanation whole theme.
However
, TV, computer will never replace a
book
. Because with
book
everyone can build own view regarding
book
impression, while in a video shows
producer
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producer's
imagination which does not always match. During the reading a
book
people can generate
impression
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impressive
from
book
without external influence and keep them in mind.
Book
can form us as individual, we can take into account that advice what we prefer. In conclusion,
old
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the old school teaching program
an old school teaching program
school
teaching program
should be develop
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should develop
should be developed
with digital tools together.
Furthermore
,
combination
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a combination
the combination
of two
sector
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sectors
can be reached a good result in
education sector
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the education sector
.
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