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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The given line graph illustrates the
number
 of visits to
Australia
 by foreign
citizen
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citizens
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 per year
while
 the table specifies the visit per country that took place
form
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from
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 the
year
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years
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 1975 to 2005. There has been a
gradually
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 increase
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in visit
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visit
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visits
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 from 1975 to 1985
while
 the
number
 goes doubled from 984 to 1995 as seen from the given chart.
However
, compared to 1975,
in
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apply
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2005 the
number
 of foreign
visitors
 has
increase
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increased
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 dramatically from 8.8 to 30.4 in 2005.
furthermore
, among all the given six
countries
 Japan and South Korea
has
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 the greatest
number
 of
visitors
 to
Australia
 in 2005 compared to 1975 as mentioned in
table
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, South Korea:
2.9
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was 2.9
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to
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in
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 1975 and 9.1 in 2005; Japan
3.2
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was 3.2
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 in 1975 to 12.0 in 2005. Meanwhile,
china
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China
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 is lying at the bottom with the lowest
visitors
 of
Australia
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in Australia
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 up to just 0.3 million people which gradually increase
up
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apply
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to 0.8 in 2005 as compared to other
countries
mention
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mentioned
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 in the table.
overall
, compared to 1975 the
number
 of foreign
visitors
 has been increasing, reaching a quite high
number
 of
visitors
 of 32 million to
Australia
while
 having a majority of
visitors
 from south
korea
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 and japan.
In
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contrary
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, the least
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 are from china, but it
safe
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is safe
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 to say that
majority
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the majority
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 of the visit to
Australia
were
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was
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 from Asia
countries
 than western
countries
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, australia, visitors, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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