In recent years, many small shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping Is this a positive or a negative development?

At Present
,
Accept space
,
lot
of normal shops are closed due to lake of business and
sametime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
many buyers are
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
to purchase goods from big shopping malls for different reasons. I will argue that why people are preferring large shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
rather than little
shopes
a mercantile establishment for the retail sale of goods or services
shops
shapes
ships
.
Firstly
, for
last few years many
Suggestion
the last few years, many
the last few years many
outlets
are closed because in
Suggestion
have been closed because
have been closed because in
every city new shopping malls established
hence
every one
all people
everyone
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
to buy there due to sellers are providing many offers to the customers, apart from that
lot
of models are available.
Next
, for
this
trade
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
not only for shopping and
same time
Suggestion
the same time
they can provide family gathering and many options are there like to watch movies together and kids have
seperate playground
Suggestion
a separate playground
separate playground
separate playgrounds
to enjoy.
For Example
, As per CNN survey
,
Accept space
,
In developing
countires
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
like India
,
Accept space
,
Brazil many new plazas are opened in
last
3 years, on top of that many international
brands
Suggestion
brand's
revenue increased to 10%.
Secondly
, due to
this
they are
lot
Suggestion
lots
of positive development is there like
,
Accept space
,
many new employment will create in different ways. On top of that
lot
of time saving in different ways to customer. Apart from
this
for
this
kind of
malls consumer
Accept comma addition
malls, consumer
can choose
what ever
one or some or every or all without specification
whatever
they want in one place due to buyer can bargain the price. In parallel many worldwide brands are coming to
door step
the sill of a door; a horizontal piece of wood or stone that forms the bottom of a doorway and offers support when passing through a doorway
doorstep
, so that everyone
choose
Suggestion
chooses
different products.
For Instance
,
Accept space
,
for
this
new
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
centres
Centers
in America every
year almost
Accept comma addition
year, almost
50,000 new jobs are created with different ways like
shopkeppers
a merchant who owns or manages a shop
shopkeepers
,
Accept space
,
security. In conclusion, due to
globalization many
Suggestion
globalization, many
brands are coming to small cities
therfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
therefor
new malls are
positive development
Suggestion
a positive development
positive developments
in that
cities
Suggestion
city
with several benefits are there like
time
Suggestion
a time
saving to buyer
,
Accept space
,
different items are available in one place and many jobs will create.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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