Some people believe that the elderly take better decision that the young generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion

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In as much as, the older citizens are more advanced in virtually everything in
life
, it does not make all their decision right. Some people believe that the older people are always correct while others oppose them, that, the young people are wiser.
This
essay will explain, in
details
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the details
, why I believe the latter.
Firstly
, a lot
have changed
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has changed
had changed
in the past few decades. The younger generations have greatly improved in their way of thinking. They have
gotten better understanding
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gotten a better understanding
about how things work. People used to believe that the older ones make the best decision, but, with the change, their thoughts and contributions may not tally with that of
world
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the world
today. Take
for instance
, women were only known to do house chores. You can hardly envision a woman getting a paid job, as the society back
them
people in general
they
did not
parmit
consent to, give permission
permit
it. Meanwhile, the recent times, women ration the house chores with their partners. Most women have,
infact
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in fact
, become the breadwinners of the families.
Secondly
, most of the advanced
generatios
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generations
generation
never received any formal education. So you know, education
nutures
help develop, help grow
nurtures
and teaches people about
life
. Education
also
guides one to better decision making.
With
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In
the case of oak of formal education, the elderly ones, many a times, make the wrong turn in
life
.
Thirdly
, amnesia and many other
disease
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diseases
the affect the aged have
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
, thereby, defecting their thoughts. To conclude,
not withstanding
despite anything to the contrary (usually following a concession)
notwithstanding
that our parents and
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
came
to
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into
the world before us, and, they have experienced
life
before we even existed, it does not mean that they are wiser.

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