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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern world,
both
 genders are working equally to achieve their goals and dream which has changed traditional
household
 rules, while comparing with the early days. Many people believe that with a busy lifestyle,
day
 to
day
household
 tasks should be shared
with
Suggestion
by
both
 of the parties. I agree with the sharing works among the partners to spend happily married life. In early ages, men used to
work
 while women spend time in the house with doing
day
 to
day
work
. With the development of the world, the human need has been expanded due to the high availability of goods and services, which involves money and wealth. So nowadays
both
 husband and wife doing jobs have become compulsory. Traditionally
household
 tasks like cooking, washing garments, taking care of children's
was
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were
women
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women's
 task while men
work
 for the there family but now it has changed completely. It is so unfair if the female has to
work
household
 tasks alone while working full time because working full time is extremely difficult. In modern-
day
 many general populations believe that men and women shire there works when
both
 are doing
jobs but
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jobs, but
 some still
belives
accept as true; take to be true
believes
 women do all the works.
working
Suggestion
Working
 together is most essential to spend quality family life.
teem
Suggestion
Teem
work
 will build up together working with each other.
also it
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Also, it
Also it
 helps
to
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with
 financial development. In conclusion, it is important to shire a working load between
both
 parties for the development of their children and family.
if
Suggestion
If
both
 party works are to make money, teamwork is import.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 it is recommended to
work
both
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 together.
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