Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, with the

use

of technology the entertainment industry and gaming has changed significantly over the years. Many people think that

effect

society

is due to television and computer games. But some are in

opinion

Suggestion

the opinion

that it has a drastic

effect

on people.

This

is essay will both sides of the opinion and suggest my opinion. The

use

of technology in gaming has given a realistic

aporoach

move towards

approach

to it, with graphic

effect

you can feel like you are playing it.

For example

the PS4 which you do action and it played on it. The Television industry now are using

graphic

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a graphic effect

effect

in action movies,

specially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

in fight scene they

use

it and give actual experience to people. By the

use

, of it feel of both television and computer has changed. The

voilence

an act of aggression (as one against a person who resists)

violence

balance

valance

show

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shown

in more important in very different ways, which has an

effect

on specially

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

and youth. They learn by watching

it but

Accept comma addition

it, but

the problem is

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

try

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trying

them with friends, and its

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

might

effect

have an effect upon

affect

the

kids

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kids'

future or can take

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

to wrong ways.

Although

, some believe that family is

were

In or at or to what place

where

the people learn, if they are though wrong things at family or

society

then

they will go in wrong directions. So every

habbit

an established custom

habit

you get from family is what

mattters

a vaguely specified concern

matters

in the growth of the individual.

For instance

, smoking is shown

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Television or Games,

society

will have a very less impact, but if a family member smokes

then

indivudal

a human being

individuals

individual

will go

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try it. To conclude, It is the responsibility of the

society

and government to share knowledge which about its benefits and drawbacks. I

stongly

with strength or in a strong manner

strongly

believe that other

factor

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factors

influence the

people

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person's

peoples'

peoples

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

in the

society

Tue Oct 01 2019

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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proliferation
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empathetic response
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media psychology
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vulnerable demographics
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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What is your opinion?

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