The dangers and complexities of modern world have made mobile phone an absolute neccessity forchildren. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, almost everyone possesses a mobile phone. It is becoming an important tool for the safety of children, especially with the new smart phones, but it

also

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involves some drawbacks.

Firstly

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, with the new smart phone parents can keep an eye on their children. They can know where they are without calling them as all these phones have built in global positioning system (

gps

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GPs

gps'

gp's

) localisation.

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will

help to reduce school

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help reduce school

truancy.

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the application can be disabled, it will give an indication of where that person is, even if the system is off.

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, with the increasing numbers of crimes

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as rape and kidnapping in modern times, it is good for children to have a mobile phone. If ever they are in

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a situation, they can transfer the news by means of text messaging or

authorities

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the authorities

can locate the place.

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, there are some disadvantages. Children are not concentrating on their studies or listening to teachers as they are texting their boyfriend or girlfriend. They are

even not doing the

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not even doing the

homework they have been given.

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, there is an increase in the number of failures at school.

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is not good for children or their future as they need good marks for university or a good job.

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mobile phones

haves

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have

had

have had

were having

are having

some constraints, I believe it is very important for children to have one as long as they are not misused.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

236 words

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The dangers and complexities of modern world have made mobile phone an absolute neccessity forchildren. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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