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People believe that in order to reduce road accidents it should be mandatory for drivers to retake the driving test every 3 years. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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Nowadays,
road
 accidents are increasing at an exponential rate as compared to the past decade,
besides
 numerous rules and regulations. There is a belief that if we can take strict observations over skills of
driver
Suggestion
the driver
 after a prerequisite
time
, it may lead to
reduction
Suggestion
a reduction
 in
causalities
someone injured or killed or captured or missing in a military engagement
casualties
. I
’m completely agreed
Suggestion
completely agree
 with the viewpoint of re-verifying driving capabilities after every three years, which may result decrease in
road
 fatalities.
This
 essay will embark on the need to retake the driving test and its implication.
To begin
 with, there is a need to understand the reasons of roadway mishaps,
this
 will clarify the need pertaining to re-evaluated the motor capabilities of motorists.
First
 is people’s driving habits always tends to get modified with
time
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
it
Suggestion
It
 has tendencies to either get improve or deteriorate.
Second
 is the inclusion of new rules, if a driver is not aware of the new act,
this
 may result in a tragedy.
Third
, a check after three years will act as an audit plan to find out abnormalities in the driver’s skills especially their perception to
road
 rage.
This
 will
also
 act as an awareness program rather than finding errors, driver will have the change to improvise. To cite an example, Canada implemented a rule that a driving license will be
update
Suggestion
updated
 after every five years along with a test, which in turn causes
reduction
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a reduction
 in two fold of
road
causalities
someone injured or killed or captured or missing in a military engagement
casualties
.
On the other hand
,
introduction
Suggestion
the introduction
 of the rules for re-evaluation of driver’s abilities to ride a vehicle will result in anger and disappointment against the government, rather than focusing on the benefits individuals will take it as a waste of their precious
time
.
This
 will cause an unnecessary halt in their schedules and business, whereas, it may
also
 impact on
economy
Suggestion
the economy
 because of delay in transports of goods and services. To illustrate, the Government of Delhi, issued a rule to stop the vehicles whose driver’s license is 10 years old to re-verify the details, resulted in a huge drama and long lane of traffic congestion at
checking
the act of reporting your presence (as at an airport or a hotel)
check-in
 points. To recapitulate, I agree with the ideology of
rechecking
any process in which electrons are added to an atom or ion (as by removing oxygen or adding hydrogen); always occurs accompanied by oxidation of the reducing agent
reducing
driver’s ability
Suggestion
the driver’s ability
 to decrease in
road
 fatalities,
this
 will have its positive effects in a small span of
time
 if implemented carefully with flexibility to citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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