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Should young people follow older peoples 's example or it is good fir them to challenge older people 's opinion and thougts . Discuss both and give ur opinion .

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With the passage of time people 's experience
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of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
 aspects
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 It is considered that young people need to to adopt the example of older
people but
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people, but
 some argue that
youngone's
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young one's
 should challenge the opinion and thoughts of
old
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the older
older
generation
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This
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an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
issue
assay
 will elucidates and scrutinize the former and later view in the upcoming paragraphs
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 To embark upon the main reason why young people should follow the example of older's examples
,
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 is help to know their
life
 experiences. Because they spend
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a number
 of
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years which
year which
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give help or assistance; be of service
helps
 to describe the difficulties and some way to solve them. So
that is
 why young
generation
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past tense of "will"
would
motivated
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motivate
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Used in specifying adjacent dimensions
by
 their experiences and become more aware about
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life
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 It is evident from
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Haryana's
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news which
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news, which
 reveals the story of one
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having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 person and in that story their grandparents play a crucial role to
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to gain with effort
achieve
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of them or themselves
their
the
 goal of his
life
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Hence
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it
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have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
 very advantageous to follow the opinion and examples of their
old
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older
generation
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However
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 many
time
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times
 people should
change
 their attitude and thinking of old
generation
 because some thoughts are not acceptable in
modern era
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the modern era
.
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At
 the previous time women were not able to study in schools
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 So young need to
change
 their mind and equal opportunity to both genders
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summing
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 , young people should
change
 the opinion and thoughts of old people so that everyone
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enjoys
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 under full of freedom
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