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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Most Universities wanted to have the same number of male and females in a certain
subject
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This
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 essay will talk about why it's not possible that studying in college cannot divide the same number of male and female students in one
subject
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First
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 of all, Not all schools are offering the same courses because every
schools
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school
have
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has
 their own specialization.
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, if someone
choose
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chooses
 to
enrolled
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enrol
 in a Nursing degree,
mostly
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most
 girls are enrollees while the boys have smaller number only so in every
subject
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 the ratio cannot be divided equally.
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, according to the latest statistics, there are a lot of females who are being born than men. So in reality, the female ratio outcasts the male. The population in a certain University cannot divide both
gender
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genders
 in one
subject
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 since they are dependent on the total of students who enrolled in their University.
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, Some parents enrolled their children in an exclusive
schools
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school
 for boys and girls. Say
for example
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, Most of the affluent families in Europe, they let their offspring enter in an exclusive University only for men or women because they can afford it very easily.
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, I conclude, that both sexes should not be a factor in a quality of education and should not be the basis for
molding
the act of creating something by casting it in a mold
moulding
modern
 students to be a successful in their chosen career.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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