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Some people believe that children should be given lessons on how to manage money in the school. do you agree or disagree?

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School curriculum includes enormous ethical and moral values along with teaching about various life
skill
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skills
.While some people think that lectures ought to be provided regarding proper allocation
on
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of
 finance in
classroom
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the classroom
classrooms
,
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,
others do not think so.I am with those individuals who think that lessons should be given on money
mangement
the act of managing something
management
 in the school. If your child is aware of how to use money on initial
stage
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stage, then
then
 there is no chance that
this
 fact will not help him in
future
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the future
.But if he is
its
the thing named or in question
it
 vice
versa
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versa, then
then
 it will cause problems in term of spending of money.School is a place where every individual come to know about various facts and their solutions which will prove in favour of them in coming days.Under the shadow of all those facts Bank note management is
also
 the fact that which surrounds your life till the
last
 minute of your's.As we clearly know that
our
plural of "I"
we
 respect is totally depending on our all those factors which are connected to our wealth and if unfortunately we fail in getting the concept of its saving
then
objective case of they
them
 in near future we have nothing to do
exept
take exception to
except
 incantation. I
am totally agreed
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totally agree
 with the
givenn
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given n
 statement.To
cnclude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
, I must say that we should make it possible for our
child
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children
 in their initial learning place so that it will surely help them in the production of rich
men
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man's
men's
 ability.
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