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In many countries, some students live with their families while studying, but other students prefer to attend universities in other cities. Do the benefits of living away from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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Not many
students
 have a chance to study at
University
while
 living with their family.
Due to
 many factors, most of the
students
 get their higher education being away from their friends and family. Is it beneficial to be away from home in pursuit of education, is the question for some people.
This
 essay describes the disadvantages of
this
 concern.
Firstly
, The autonomy of
students
 may lead to addictive habits, which is potentially dangerous for health. Most of the freshmen in the Universities are in their late teens, and
this
 is
also
 an age where they would like to explore their life. Some of the
students
 try new things, and
due to
 the hype and wrong friendships, school
pass outs
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passouts
 may get addicted to drugs in their early
University
 years.
According to
 the Federal Bureau of Investigation, Most of the drug peddlers are active in the
University
 towns. The parents must have frequent visits to the
students
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student's
students'
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 dorms and apartments
while
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during
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 their son or daughter's tenure at the
University
, to prevent
such
 issues.
Secondly
, the pupils of the
University
 may get overwhelmed with the number of classes and may choose menial jobs over a career with better prospects.
According to
 the article published in
New
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the New
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 York Times, The drop rate of
University
students
is
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has been
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 alarmingly high in past five years. The author attributes it to the lack of competency for the growing technical jobs. Had it been the case, where they had
support
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the support
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 and guidance of parents,
such
 youth could have made better career choices.
Finally
, staying with
parents
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your parents
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while
 studying has a lot of advantages. Not only
they
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do they
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 provide their kids with the best guidance, but
also
 keep in check to keep away from bad practices.
However
, the parenthood and the ethics they inculcate from childhood remain an important aspect.

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task response
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coherence cohesion
Work on using cohesive devices and linking words to improve the flow and coherence of the essay. Ensure that ideas are logically structured and connected throughout the essay.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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