Some people that competative sports shuld be included as a subject in school. while others believe that it has negative effect on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

When discussing whether
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sports should be included in school, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue.
Although
some believe
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sposrts
an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition
sports
are bad for our children, because
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
focus on
whinning
having won
winning
rather than
sportsmenship
fairness in following the rules of the game
sportsmanship
, others think it is a good way to motivate our children. I believe,
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sports are a good way to educate our children how to set a goal and achieve it. In
this
essay, I will provide reasons and explanations to support my opinion. One argument in favour of my view, is that through
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sports a child can learn to work hard in order to achieve his desires.
For example
, a young boy who is training for the regional swimming competition will practice twice a day, have a balanced diet to maintain his training
schedual
plan for an activity or event
schedule
schedules
and go to sleep early so he will have enough energy for the
next
day.
This
will assist him in
becomming
according with custom or propriety
becoming
better
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
the rest of his friends and he will eventually win the competition. By doing so, the child learns that working hard, even
on
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at
the expense of other leisures can help him reach his goals, a lesson he can
applay
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
apply
in every aspect of his life.
This
example
show
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shows
that
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sprts
an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition
sports
can teach our children about the importance of working hard
inorder
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in order
to achieve a goal.
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Another
view to support my opinion is that through
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sports, even
unacomplished
Not accomplished or performed; unfinished; also, deficient in accomplishment; unrefined
unaccomplished
accomplished
children can learn that they are good at something, a lesson that can help them later in life. To
illustrae
clarify by giving an example of
illustrate
, a child who is not unsuccessful in school, might believe he is not good enough.
However
, if he realizes he can
runs
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run
better
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
the rest of his classmates, he will learn that there are other aspect
in
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of
life in which he is better
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
others.
This
can improve his confidence substantially.
This
example shows that
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sports can be a valuable tool teaching children about themselves. In conclusion, I maintain that
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
sports
is
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are
an important tool that can teach our children about hard work, as well as improving the
selfesteem
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self esteem
of children. Due to that, I
stronly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
believe it should be incorporated as a subject in school.
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