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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
There has been an increase in demand for housing facilities and many people consider building houses in the
countryside
 as
this
 is
only space
Suggestion
the only space
 available for
residence
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residential
 purposes. While some people argue that the government should start allocating places to build houses in the
countryside
, I believe that people should not be allowed to construct buildings as
this
 will increase pollution and population in the rural
area
. Arguably, housing has become a
great
Suggestion
greater
 issue in the
city
 and it has been growing at an alarming rate. Building houses in the
countryside
 would not resolve the issue and it might create more problems
such
 as more traffic and pollution.
Instead
 of building houses in the rural
area
, we should encourage builder to build more vertical buildings or skyscrapers in the
city
area
.
This
 will not only reduce the cost of
living but
Accept comma addition
living, but
also
 provide a sustainable residence to
city
 people.
Moreover
, if we continue to build more houses and unable to utilise space properly
then
 there will be no
place
 left to
coup
brick that is laid sideways at the top of a wall
cope
 with an increasing population. Another reason is that people are mostly engaged in stressful work all the time and the
countryside
area
 could provide a
place
 where you can have some quality time with your loved ones. It is a great
place
 to relax and it
also
 provide a calm
place
 out of the bustling
city
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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