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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to s3x and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to s3x and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The charts illustrate the information about the type of
music
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albums
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 purchased by different age groups of both male and female British populations. The survey was conducted by s3x, which included
pop
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,
rock
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 and classical
music
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.
Overall
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, most
of
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the
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British elder
people
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 preferred classical
music
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 compared to
pop
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 and
rock
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music
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. 25-30 age group
people
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 are interested in all kinds of
music
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. Males contributed to huge
sales
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 than
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a woman
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woman
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women
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 in all kinds of
music
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. Youth
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aged between 16 and 24 are highly interested in
pop
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 and
rock
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music
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musicians
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who
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and
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 contributed around 30% of
sales
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 in each. Middle aged
people
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aging
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ageing
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 from 25 to 35 are the
people
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 who brought most
pop
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 and
rock
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music
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albums
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 with over 30% of whole
sales
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 in both areas. Elder
people
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aging
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 more than 45 contributed very less compared to
people
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aging
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 below 45 and above 35 in
pop
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 and
rock
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music
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sales
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.
On the other hand
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, classical
music
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albums
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 are more popular among older
people
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 of
age
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the age
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 group above 45 with almost 20% of total
sales
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.
This
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 was followed by 25-35 aged
people
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 with around 15% of
sales
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.
People
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aging
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aged
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 between 16 to 24 and between 35-44 showed very little in buying classical
music
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albums
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 as they both contributed less than 5% of
sales
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. Males contributed to approximately 10%, 10% and 5% higher
sales
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 than females in
pop
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,
rock
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 and classical
albums
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, albums, pop, rock, people, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph representation
  • categorized
  • predominant
  • disparities
  • similarities
  • age-related preferences
  • noticeable trends
  • age brackets
  • wider appeal
  • demographics
  • speculate
  • resurgence
  • vinyl records
  • digital streaming
  • music genres
  • albums purchases
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