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Some people think that managerial posts in private companies and in government are more suitable for men. Others think that given the opportunity women can be successful managers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Due to modernisation and technological advancements, almost everyone is working irrespective of the gender to fulfil their growing needs and livelihood. Some inhabitants are of the view that males are fit for authoritarian positions in private as well as public sector. But some opponents think that chances should be given to females and they can manage all the activities of the
office
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 very well. I enunciate my opinion in the subsequent paragraphs.
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, discrimination on the basis of gender should not be there, while assigning a duty to a person in the
office
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 because there is no link between sex of an individual and his/her intellectual level. But some people think that to higher positions, men should be appointed because they have less responsibilities in their homes and they can stay late in the offices to fulfil the requirements.
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, males seldom take leave from work like maternity leave.
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, some individuals think that more chances for management of the
office
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 should be given to women as they are more patient and hard-working than men. They consistently do every task very accurately.
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, to eliminate
differences
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the differences
 of males and females,
upliftment
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 of women should be done by appointing them for
significant purpose
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significant purposes
a significant purpose
. According to my opinion, biased behaviour of employers should not be there, while interviewing the persons for various jobs in the
office
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, We cannot decide the person`s capabilities by taking their gender into consideration.
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