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Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on the child. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There has been an ever increasing use of technology, children are spending more
time
 on television,
video
 and computer games. It's often argued that
this
 is a positive phenomenon while others disagree and think it will make children pay less attention to study.
This
 essay agrees that spending
time
 on electronic devices are an advantage to children.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view. It's clear that electronic devices not only gives children a better way to entertain themselves, but
also
 have a huge benefit to children. Wikipedia is a good example, children can learn whatever they want to learn on Wikipedia with very convenient operation by just typing what they want to know, and
also
video games
Accept comma addition
video, games
, children can learn other countries' languages,
practice
Suggestion
practiced
reflexs
an automatic instinctive unlearned reaction to a stimulus
reflexes
reflex's
reflex
, some school
also
 uses
video
 games to teach their students too. But, many disagree and feel that electronic devices deprives children, they think children may addicted to
video
 games or watching televisions. Addicted to
video
 games are not
alarmist
Suggestion
alarmed
, it is a compulsive mental health disorder that can cause severe damage in one's life,
such
 as suffer from sleep deprivation, and
also
 not paying attention to their school works. I disagree
this
 opinion, because with teacher's and parent's teach,
childs
a young person of either sex
children
child
 will know
to
Suggestion
of
 alternate studies with electronic devices, helps them to study better. In conclusion, while the benefits of electronic devices, especially internets
, ,
Suggestion
,
 allow students to tap
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 limitless sources of information, some still think that people should be wary of children spent their
time
 on electronic devices.
However
, as long as we are careful to keep in mind the importance of leading children to alternate their
time
 correctly, the benefits are clearly positive.
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