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1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Tertiary
education
 plays a vital role in human life. It is commonly believed that pupils ought to pay their higher
education
 fee by on their own
instead
 of getting
support
 from the state. I completely disagree with
this
 statement and will
support
 my viewpoints in following paragraph.
To begin
 with, if the state will not
support
 their juvenile citizen to get tertiary
education
 than these problems will happen, those students who do not have
such
 privileges to afford their higher
education
 will not be able to get admission in their desired field and will not be able to perform in jobs at their highest for the rest of their life.
For example
, there is report on
south
the region of the United States lying to the south of the Mason-Dixon line
South
asia
the nations of the Asian continent collectively
Asia
 that 55% students in subcontinent cannot afford the particular field where they desired to go and due to the lack of public university they have to switch their field. After that, the
government
 should
support
 their youngster to get higher
education
 because it does help the country’s economy. The more people get higher
education
 the more they will benefit their country’s economy, there will be less unemployment rate, they will be able to get a job in any organization, they will think for the prosperity of themselves as well as the prosperity of the country, some of them even able to start their own business eventually it will help
government
 to run the country.
For instance
, if someone starts a
business
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business, then
then
 they will hire some employees, they will pay tax to the
government
, so it will be a benefit for all from
person
Suggestion
the person
people
 who started the business to his employees to
eventually
Suggestion
eventual
government
. In conclusion,
although
 there are a lot of people who think that a person who want to get higher
education
 should
support
 their
education
 by own,
however
, I believe that
government
 ought to
support
 their citizen in order to use their true potential for the betterment of the country.
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