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Some people think that big international sporting events are not worthwhile for the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

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Certain people view that organization of enormous sporting competition are not beneficial for the host
country
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. In my opinion, that organization of sports competition, song contest and beauty events are a big platform for the host
country
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 to show about culture, nature and landscape, industry
ect
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.
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, due to the indicated events amount of tourist can be increased significantly.
Firstly
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, to taking
such
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 kind of responsibility like a
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sport
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sporting
 event
are showing
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is showing
country
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 potential and stability. In my opinion, that sporting events can bring a lot of benefits and profits for
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country
(United Kingdom) a region created by territorial division for the purpose of local government
county
 budget.
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, the
country
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 starts to prepare for the event before the hand and consider which
sport
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 buildings are more appropriate and can cover all world standards requirements. If the government cannot find they start to build a new
sport
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 complex, which will remain in the
country
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 forever.
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, local population can spend leisure time and get a training there in the future and can advance own
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sport
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sports
 staff for the big Olimpic games.
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, organization of any events demonstrates
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country
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country's
 stability, cause tourists attractions
to
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in
 the host nation. Apart from that, the
country
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 can recreate certain
sport
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 complex as
touristic
someone who travels for pleasure
tourists
 relax zone.
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, having enormous
sport
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 buildings
are
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is
also
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 a good opportunity for
country
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sport
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 team to train there and keep the
country
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 budget inside. In conclusion, every event
are challenged
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is challenged
challenge
challenges
for
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in
 the
country
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. Making a good plan and certain strategy lead to significant worthwhile profit.
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, possess opportunity making events are more beneficial than disadvantageously.
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