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Advertising targeted at children will bring negative effects on the young, do you agree or disagree?

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We are currently living in a modern society, surrounded with massive number of advertisements from newspaper to social media platforms, as well as children are. While some argue that kids are not negatively influenced by children targeting ads, I believe that promoting materials targeted at children
has been
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have been
 harmful for them. On the one hand, a few portions of commercials
has
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have
 positive impacts on children. Some ads concerning life essentials can affect children to behave and demand for healthy habits or products.
For example
, ads can help children crave for nutritious food
such
 as dairy and minerals or teach them to brush their teeth regularly.
In addition
, informative advertisement showing their social commitment of corporations is beneficial for teenagers. From a few years ago, one convenience store franchise started to advertise their social service called
children safety zone
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a child safety zone
child safety zone
the child safety zone
children's safety zone
, in which staffs call police when a
child
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child's
 customer is in an emergency situation.
On the other hand
, the majority of commercial aimed for children has adverse consequences. The youth can be exposed by commercialism, which makes people evaluate their self-esteem depends on the ability to possess products. Most of the psychologists,
children
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child
 experts and educators have said that materialism and commercialism increased the growing rate of children’s depression, lower self-esteem and suicidal thought. Aside from that, the young are not skilled enough to compare products regarding various values.
Furthermore
, advertisers abuse
this
 fact and make advertisement stimulating to children in order to use pester power. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both and for influence of children targeting adverts and I believe that they are nothing but harmful contents
to
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of
 the young.

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