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some people think that the development of technology help to decrease crime and other people think that would encourage crime to discuss both views and give your opinion

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Technological development is taking place rapidly these days. Some would have argued developing these reduce the percentage of criminal acts. While on the other group of people put their argument by saying that
instead
 of lowering crime rates these advancements in technology will make the criminal activities more higher I believe these developing
tendency
Suggestion
tendencies
 in technology has contributed a lot for the decrease of criminal activities.
To begin
 with, a number of cyber crimes are rapidly taking place due to the invention and implementation of technological items. By using the hidden cameras, individuals these days capturing the private moment of others. The perpetrator who does so tend so is found to be blackmailing by threatening to explore the privacy of them which are often shameful to see
such
 as sexual intimacy.
Therefore
, the criminal continuously enforces the innocent person to do in terms of their interest like
victims
Suggestion
the victims
 are being compelled to give money.
That is
 the reason why it has been seen that crimes are happening with the support of the technologies.
However
, it is
undenied
not precisely limited, determined, or distinguished
undefined
underneath
 that
installments
a payment of part of a debt; usually paid at regular intervals
instalments
instruments
instalments'
 of these technologies have created terror among the criminal to involve more in
such
 activities
such
 as CCTV Camera on roads or shops.
On the other hand
, because of the
installments
a device that requires skill for proper use
instruments
 of these items, many criminal minds think the outcome a thousand times before attempting to harm others. Since the cameras can easily capture the moment where they are doing robbery or murder in the places.
For instance
, in Australia, nearly 45
% robbery
Accept comma addition
%, robbery
 in public places has been reduced, after putting the
installments
a payment of part of a debt; usually paid at regular intervals
instalments
instruments
instalments'
 of the cameras, and
the
people in general
they
then
 suffer seem to have less
complaining
Suggestion
complained
 about that in the past.
Thus
 the technologies
have proved
Suggestion
have proven
 that they are actually contributing to reducing the crimes because of their smartest features. In conclusion, these inventions have found to be more effective to reduce the crime rates, because of its effectiveness to create a terror
among of the criminal
Suggestion
among the criminal
 minds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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