Some people think that young people should spend their free time with teir families instead of enjoying outside entertainment. However, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
When discussing whether young people should spend more
time
with their families, rather than enjoying entertainment by themselves, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue. Although
some people believe it is important for people to spend leisure time
without their families, in order to meet and engage with new friends, others think that free time
should be used for familiy
a social unit living together
family
ancounters
only. In my come together
encounters
encounter
opinion
, young people should spend their time
with their families, in order to avoid the financial expences
and individual risks associated with it. In amounts paid for goods and services that may be currently tax deductible (as opposed to capital expenditures)
expenses
experiences
this
essay, I will provide examples and arfuments
to support my a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
opinion
.
One argument in favour of my opinion
, is that people should spend their free time
with their families because it is less expensive, in comparison to individual outside entertainment. For example
, an article by
the New York Times published in 2008 reported that young people who Suggestion
from
in
prefered
to attend music festivals without their families spent 20,000 dollars more more desirable than another
preferred
anually
on leisure events in comparison to other people. without missing a year
annually
This
is because expenses such
as gasoline, hotels and food are being paid by the individual, rather then
being shared by the entire family. conjunction used in comparatives
than
This
example illustrates that family activites
are much more economical and cheap.
Another view to support my any specific behavior
activities
opinion
, is that young people who spend time
without their beloved ones, are more exposed to dengarous
substances. To illustrate, in a recent poll done by the Israeli government among men 18-25 years of age, more involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
dangers
then
40% reported trying conjunction used in comparatives
than
ilegal
drugs and 40% reported being drunk at least once during a music festival they attended with their friends. prohibited by law or by official or accepted rules
illegal
This
shows, that when spending time
without their families, people are prone to try new, and risky activities.
In conclusion, I maintain that young people should spend more of their free time
with their familiy
, because it is cheaper and safer. More so, it is the best a social unit living together
family
families
time
to now our parents and brothers and realize they are truely
our best friends.in accordance with truth or fact or reality
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