Some people think that young people should spend their free time with teir families instead of enjoying outside entertainment. However, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

When discussing whether young people should spend more
time
with their families, rather than enjoying entertainment by themselves, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue.
Although
some people believe it is important for people to spend leisure
time
without their families, in order to meet and engage with new friends, others think that free
time
should be used for
familiy
a social unit living together
family
ancounters
come together
encounters
encounter
only. In my
opinion
, young people should spend their
time
with their families, in order to avoid the financial
expences
amounts paid for goods and services that may be currently tax deductible (as opposed to capital expenditures)
expenses
experiences
and individual risks associated with it. In
this
essay, I will provide examples and
arfuments
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
to support my
opinion
. One argument in favour of my
opinion
, is that people should spend their free
time
with their families because it is less expensive, in comparison to individual outside entertainment.
For example
, an article
by
Suggestion
from
in
the New York Times published in 2008 reported that young people who
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
to attend music festivals without their families spent 20,000 dollars more
anually
without missing a year
annually
on leisure events in comparison to other people.
This
is because expenses
such
as gasoline, hotels and food are being paid by the individual, rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
being shared by the entire family.
This
example illustrates that family
activites
any specific behavior
activities
are much more economical and cheap. Another view to support my
opinion
, is that young people who spend
time
without their beloved ones, are more exposed to
dengarous
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
dangers
substances. To illustrate, in a recent poll done by the Israeli government among men 18-25 years of age, more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
40% reported trying
ilegal
prohibited by law or by official or accepted rules
illegal
drugs and 40% reported being drunk at least once during a music festival they attended with their friends.
This
shows, that when spending
time
without their families, people are prone to try new, and risky activities. In conclusion, I maintain that young people should spend more of their free
time
with their
familiy
a social unit living together
family
families
, because it is cheaper and safer. More so, it is the best
time
to now our parents and brothers and realize they are
truely
in accordance with truth or fact or reality
truly
our best friends.
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