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Q. People who go to live in other countries, should follow the customs and traditions of the new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We live in a difficult world which changing
everyday
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every day
. Some people want to develop their skills, some people want
more safety
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a more safety life
life
 without wars and revolutions;
therefore
, people have right to choose where they will live.
However
, I think, we should follow the laws and traditions of the new
country
. On the one hand, people should follow the customs from the
first
 step their new
life
 in a new
country
.
Moreover
, people begin to follow laws
more earlier
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earlier
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 they will be in a new
country
. Because, they need to follow some formal procedures,
for instance
, to fill all necessary documents and forms correctly. I think,
this
 procedure shows the government your intentions to live follow the laws in a new
country
.
On the other hand
, if people run from wars or revolutions, they can not
to follow
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follow
 customs and they try to save their
life
. Of course, when you will in safety place,
for example
, in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
, you
should
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should begin
to begin
 legalisation procedure regarding laws.
However
, to be good in the new
country
 you should follow the traditions.
First
 of all, you need to know
language
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a language
the language
, because language is traditions and the instrument for successful assimilation. People who go to live in the other countries should interested in
museum
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museums
a museum
the museum
, arts, writers or something else that storage a culture. I think it
have
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has
had
 great
significant
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significance
 in your
live
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life
of
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in
 the new
country
. In conclusion, we have many reasons to live in other countries.
However
, I believe that all of us should follow the customs and traditions to have a better
life
 and be successful in a new
country
.
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