With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?
Nowadays many animal
spices
are becoming Correct your spelling
species
extinction
Replace the word
extinct
due to
human activity for
instance, cutting trees and hunting. In the following Add the comma(s)
, for
essay
I will discuss some of the biggest problems associated with animal extinction and will propose solutions to tackle Add a comma
essay,
this
problem
. On the one hand, one of the most significant reasons of assert
Change preposition
for asserting
animals
is food
chain. Add an article
a food
the food
Firstly
, it can be clearly seen that animals
also
help us to providing
a part of Change the verb form
provide
food
chain likeAdd an article
the food
,
dairy and protein. Remove the comma
apply
Secondly
, the majority of Add an article
the country
country
in the world Fix the agreement mistake
countries
are
have Unnecessary verb
apply
a
different Correct article usage
apply
business
. Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
For example
, Africa it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct article usage
the center
center
of animal species and their people have great income in Change the spelling
centre
this
way. Thirdly
, conserve
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conserving
animals
not only does it
plays a crucial role but Verb problem
apply
also
it
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apply
cones
with Correct your spelling
comes
multitude
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a multitude
benefits
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of benefits
such
as,
animal fertilizer. Remove the comma
apply
Also
it can Add a comma
Also,
effect
on growth Correct your spelling
affect
plants
and trees. Change preposition
of plants
On the other hand
, the best way to tackle tis
Correct your spelling
this
problem
is in the hands of the high ranking
official. Add a hyphen
high-ranking
Moreover
, if the government enforcing
draconian punishments we will be faced with less human activity. Wrong verb form
enforces
Nevertheless
, another factor which must be considered is improvement
of Add an article
the improvement
an improvement
educational
. Recent research has shown that Replace the word
education
with
Change preposition
apply
counseling
and making people aware could help us to tackle Change the spelling
counselling
this
problem
. Finally
, with develop
provincial towns deforestation will Replace the word
the development of
occurred
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occur
.
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
furthermore
, enhancing building construction should not be run just for financial objectives. In conclusion, today we are suffering from lack
of natural resources Correct article usage
a lack
because
human activity likeAdd the preposition
because of
,
cutting trees and hunting Remove the comma
apply
animals
. However
, with
enforcing draconian punishments and providing education we can solve Change preposition
by
this
problem
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion