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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The advancement in
communication
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 technology has significantly altered the way people communicate with each others. While it is convenient in contacting friends and family, allowing people to reach them at anytime and from anywhere they want, it has had a detrimental impact on their social lives. I totally agree with the statement because it decreased the levels of socialisation and intimacy. It cannot be denied that
communication
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 tools
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 as mobile phones and computers made it convenient to keep people connected. Having said that, I believe that people used to spend more meaningful time together, before the introduction of modern
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 system.
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 people message each other often, many times they will not actually meet and spend time together. I would say that most of our relationships are superficial in recent years In terms of decreased intimacy, it is becoming more and more prevalent to become a friend with someone who has never met on the Internet.
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 people may share their personal lives and communicate with them on the Internet, using social media or other forms of
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 tools, they are not someone who can rely on in case of an emergency. Focusing too much on ''friends'' on the Internet decreases the time spent with close family members and friends,
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 leading to an issue of social isolation. In conclusion, I completely agree with the idea that the new forms of
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 as email and messaging have negatively impacted on people's social activity. People used to have more intimate relationships with loved ones, rather than focusing on the superficial friendship based on the social media connection.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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