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Car ownership has increased rapidly over the past thirty years

#car #ownership #thirty #years
Nowadays almost people live in big Cities and they have own cars to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs travelling from one place to another
.
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.
because
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Because
 of
this
 there is a traffic jam everywhere.
Therefore
, government should take strict decisions to deal with
this
 problem like increasing
tax
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taxes
 payment. 30 years ago the
car
 owners
was
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were
 actually less than the current situation. There
is
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are
 many reasons behind
this
,
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,
firstly
 cars become cheaper as technology grew and
second one
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the second one
 is everyone wants to comfortable life
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.
some
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Some
 years ago
family
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the family
families
 had only one
car
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 at present time each family
owns average
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owns an average
 two cars
.
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every
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Every
 person
use
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uses
car
 to go their
destination they
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destination, they
 don't want to go
in
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on
 public transport
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 by
this
 increased traffic jam and accidents
However
, cars are very useful
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.
it
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It
save
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saves
 our time and give a comfortable life
.
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.
now
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Now
 a days people
uses
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are using
 their
car
 as a
texi
a car driven by a person whose job is to take passengers where they want to go in exchange for money
taxi
 so they make money for their livelihoods. To conclude, it is true that the growth of the
car
 owners is giving lot of traffic problems ,so the authorities have to make rules and trying to discourage the use of vechicle

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