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Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. Discuss, what is your opinion?

#people #taxes #society #citizen #responsibilities
There has long been much contention about whether people should take part in
development
Suggestion
the development
 of the country they are living in or their concern is limited
to share
Suggestion
to, sharing
to sharing
 a proportion of their hard earn money in the shape of taxes to the Government. I agree with the former perspective for a number of reasons. There are myriad of arguments in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of my stance. The most conspicuous
one
 is that by giving taxes does not necessarily mean that
one
 has done with their liabilities, there are numerous other duties that must be done by citizens like
follow
Suggestion
to follow
 the traffic rules, law and order, take part in cleaning, green environment, preventing pollution, knowledge sharing, be a role model for younger peers and what not. Apart from that a responsible resident should
also
 consider their social, moral and cultural values. Not only can a good native set example for their children and family to be a productive citizen
for
Suggestion
of
 their nation, but
also
 youth will follow their lead and those attributes will be passed on to the
next
 generation.
Hence
, it is apparent why many are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of giving more towards society. In my opinion,
one
 should be more than a
tax payer
someone who pays taxes
taxpayer
 to the motherland. The
first
 and far most
duty
Suggestion
duties
 of a local is to pay all
kind
Suggestion
kinds
 of taxes to the relevant authorities so the government can run smoothly.
Besides
that people
Accept comma addition
that, people
 needs to be a part of all the other responsibilities they are capable of performing so that they can thrive as a nation to compete within
this
globalize
Suggestion
globalization
 era of advancement. To conclude, in view of the arguments
outlined above
Suggestion
outlined above, one
one
 can conclude that the benefits of contributing to the society other than paying taxes are indeed too great to ignore.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental
  • development
  • public services
  • social contract
  • financially support
  • civic responsibility
  • communal activities
  • engaged in the political process
  • advocating
  • enriches
  • actively participate
  • political process
  • less fortunate
  • environmentally responsible
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