Some people think that people can not benefit from international travel. Why is this case? How can people improve their understanding of other countries?

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With the life standard improving, more and more people like to choose travelling as their way to entertain themselves.
However
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, some people claim that travelling will bring a lot of negative impact on us. The possible reasons behind the phenomenon will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
and
also
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some advice will be provided for understanding other nations.
First
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, people may think that international travelling costs lots of money and time.
For example
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, compared to domestic travelling, the price of
international fight ticket
Suggestion
the international fight ticket
an international fight ticket
international fight tickets
or hotels is much higher and
unaffordable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
for many people. While some enthusiastic tourists pay the money by credit cards, which means they need to pay off the debt and sustain some financial pressure for a long time.
Likewise
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, international sightseers need to spend a longer time on their journey and they have to work overtime to make up their missing workload. Another reason might be local people’s lives will be affected greatly by lots of global
travelers’
a person who changes location
travellers
misbehaviors
improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviours
misbehaviours'
misbehaviour's
. Many tourists do lots of
misbehaviors
improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviour
misbehaviours
misbehaviours'
during the trip and show
unrespect
Suggestion
to local historic places.
For example
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, In
Roman
Suggestion
Rome
, many oversea tourists wandered the fountain with bare-breasted bodies or they carved on the monument and spat everywhere. Regarding to improve the understanding of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country, I believe reading some updated travel guide and have a good preparation is a good way to understand a foreign culture and
also
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accept some exotic customs before you travel.
Besides
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,
government
Suggestion
the government
should take the responsibility to set up some rules to protect its own culture and historic relics.
Thus
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, it will be good to no matter you are a
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
or you are a local one.

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