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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree ? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children

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It is essential to teach the children the difference between
right
 and wrong at their growing age. The awareness of
this
 can be raised by punishing them. I believe it is not always important to punish your child in order to make him realize the
right
 and erroneous
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. If it becomes important to punish the child because of any act,
then
 it should be not a severe punishment. Parents and teachers should
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 the sensitivity level of the child before
grueling
cooking by direct exposure to radiant heat (as over a fire or under a grill)
grilling
 them. Growing age of the children is very crucial for them and it is
responsibility
Suggestion
the responsibility
 of the parents and teachers to give them
awareness
Suggestion
an awareness
 of the
right
 and wrong. Children have a delicate mind and easily absorb the things going on around them. The
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of the children is formed by their observation. If there is
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of negativity in their
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
, they will become pessimistic and reactive.
However
,
postivity
the character of the positive electric pole
positivity
 will lead to a well mannered
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Punishment not necessarily leads the children to distinguish between
right
 and wrong.
However
, excess penalizing makes children rebellious and ill mannered. They start considering parents and children as their enemies. Recently, a private school teacher physically abused a student for not doing his homework and punished him till death.
This
 caused a lot of pain to his parents and repute of the institute. In conclusion, children should be taught discipline at an early
age but
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age, but
 in a polite manner, so that it does not
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 their personalities when they grow up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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