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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that people are judged based on their social
status
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 and personal
wealth
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 nowadays, and traditional values
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 as integrity and honesty are being forgotten. To a certain extent, I would agree with the fact that people are valued based on their
wealth
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 and
status
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 these days, but I
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 believe that old fashioned values still
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play
 an important part in our
societies
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society
. It is believed that we are living in the pop culture and
materialistic era
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the materialistic era
 these days, as the public judge each individual based on his/her social
status
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 and
wealth
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. It can be seen from how celebrities become famous nowadays. Many celebrities
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have been
 popular because of their physical appearance and personal
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 Kim Kardashian. Her reality television program never shows any world class acting quality, but only shows about her luxurious mansions and fancy cars. And
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 there are other celebrities who are well known due to his/her social
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 as the son or the daughter of a wealthy family. One of the examples would be Paris Hilton.
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 she has many bad attitudes, she is still popular because she inherits the assets of her parents.
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 traditional values
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 as respect others, being responsible, honesty and integrity seem to be forgotten nowadays, but they still play an important part in many communities. In common cases, employers are still assessing their potential employees based their hard working attitude, positive behaviour and their integrity. And
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 business people are still looking for business partners who are reliable, can be trusted, and dependable.
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, it is important for adults to educate their children about these positive values because they still play an essential part in the societies. In conclusion, even though people are judged based on their
wealth
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 and social
status
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 nowadays, but I do believe that old fashioned values
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 as honour, respect and trust cannot be eliminated from our daily lives.
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Therefore we
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Therefore, we
 must teach our young generation about these cultures, in order for them to survive and succeed in the future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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