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The car is a disastrous 20th Century invention that has made the world’s cities more dangerous and polluted, as well as being responsible for the deaths of millions of people in accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

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The car has certainly had some negative advertising in recent decades. Automobiles have been blamed for many of the reasons that affect of city, air pollution and traffic accidents. I completely agree with that automobiles has been a disastrous invention.
First
, there is a lot of pollution has done because of the automobiles with
this
 environmental problem most of the people
were suffer
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were suffering
suffered
have suffered
 with
health disease
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health, disease
 like lung cancer, water
also
 polluted with the emission of the gas from the cars.
For example
, from the recent studies the people who lived in
metropoliten
relating to or characteristic of a metropolis
metropolitan
 cities they were more prone to get cancer because of the pollution due to
this
 reason automobile dangerous to the cities.
Furthermore
, another negative consequence with
this
 discovery was accidents
,
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,
 the cities were built before the invention of the automobiles, and were never designed for heavy traffic
as a
result we
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result, we
 see
norrow
not wide
narrow
 roads crowded with vehicles so that more chance to
happend
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happen
happened
 accidents. For
instant
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an instant
, one of the city in India Hyderabad has some places very
costricted
especially tense; especially in some dialects
constricted
 but the traffic was very high due that reason every year there more accidents
occured
come to pass
occurred
. In conclusion, there are high negative
concequences
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
 with these automobile
innovation
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innovations
, I think
this
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This
 automobile innovation was a threatening to global boom town in
reacent
new
recent
 decades.
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