The car is a disastrous 20th Century invention that has made the world’s cities more dangerous and polluted, as well as being responsible for the deaths of millions of people in accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

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The car has certainly had some negative advertising in recent decades. Automobiles have been blamed for many of the reasons that affect of city, air pollution and traffic accidents. I completely agree with that automobiles has been a disastrous invention.

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, there is a lot of pollution has done because of the automobiles with

this

environmental problem most of the people

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were suffering

suffered

have suffered

with

health disease

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health, disease

like lung cancer, water

also

polluted with the emission of the gas from the cars.

For example

, from the recent studies the people who lived in

metropoliten

relating to or characteristic of a metropolis

metropolitan

cities they were more prone to get cancer because of the pollution due to

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reason automobile dangerous to the cities.

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, another negative consequence with

this

discovery was accidents

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the cities were built before the invention of the automobiles, and were never designed for heavy traffic

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result we

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, one of the city in India Hyderabad has some places very

costricted

especially tense; especially in some dialects

constricted

but the traffic was very high due that reason every year there more accidents

occured

come to pass

occurred

. In conclusion, there are high negative

concequences

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with these automobile

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innovations

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The car is a disastrous 20th Century invention that has made the world’s cities more dangerous and polluted, as well as being responsible for the deaths of millions of people in accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports in the media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. Huyen.

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