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the number of people are at risk at serious health problem is only because of overweight. what is the reason and how it can be solved?

#people #risk #health #reason
At present, many nations people are suffering with health issues due to obesity. They are several reasons
of
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for
this but
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this, but
 certain
preventation
the activity of formally presenting something (as a prize or reward)
presentation
 could
slove
find the solution to (a problem or question) or understand the meaning of
solve
this
 issue.
Firstly
, nowadays several persons are facing
seviour
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
 medical issues like heart problem and High blood
plessure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
 because of overweight for consuming more junk
food
 like pizza and burgers
therefore
 most of them is
suffereing
a state of acute pain
suffering
 with
this
 problem
,
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, moreover, many
moreover
 many schools are providing
unhealth
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
 eating items
ratherthan
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rather than
 healthy
food
hence
childerns
also
 facing same problem.
In addition
 Lake of
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
,
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,
 currently everyone is busy with their personal and professional
schedules
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schedules, therefore
therefore
 they don't have to time
spend
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to spend
 physical
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 like running and walking
this
 is
also
 one main cause to
increase
 the weight.
For Example
,
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,
 As per World health organization in
world
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the world
 almost 20% people are suffering with overweight and every day
this
 percentage is increasing a lot. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, Mainly, government should take necessary action to
reslove
bring to an end; settle conclusively
resolve
this things
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these things
this thing
 like
io
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
I
yo
increase
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
to
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of
public
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the public
 like about weight issue and how
this
plural of "this"
these
those
 people are suffering with
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 kind of problems
therefor
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there for
 many will change. In Support to that try to control junk
food
 in near schools and
colleges
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colleges, hence
hence
childerns
 can't eat unwanted
things
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things, however
however
 teachers should take action like to
increase
 physical activity service in schools and include parents and
childerns
then
 automatically everyone should get
awareness
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aware
 of
this issues
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this issue
these issues
.
For Instance
, In Norway authority passed
rule
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a rule
the rule
 to
public
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the public
 as no one
bring
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brings
unhealth
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
 things to school and same time kids should play minimum 10 hours in weekly
,
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,
 it's given very
possitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 things
to
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in
 public and now all teenagers are very fit. In conclusion, many humans are facing obesity issues and causes several health issues because of eating junk
food
 and
lake
the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable
lack
 of
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 to
aviod
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
this
 government should take necessary action like
increase
 awareness
to
Suggestion
of
 public and same time
increase
 physical activity course in schools
therefore
 many one avoid
this
 issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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