The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the percentage of three different
electricity
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sources produced in four major countries from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
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,
while
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Vietnam and
India
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produced considerably higher
electricity
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from fossil
fuel
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fuels
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,
Sweden
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and Morocco appeared to harness
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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as their main
electricity
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source. Only
India
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and
Sweden
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had
electricity
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produced from nuclear
power
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. Among
four
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the four
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mentioned nations,
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India
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India's
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electricity
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depended mostly on fossil fuel, which accounted for over
four fifths
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. Meanwhile,
Sweden
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and Morocco used only 4 per
cent
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and 5 per
cent
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this
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of this
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source, respectively, for
electricity
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production.
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
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was used mainly in Morocco, which made up 95 per
cent
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, followed by
Sweden
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, where over
a
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apply
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half
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electricity
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of electricity
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production was responsible by
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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,
while
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India
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India's
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electricity
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production
depended
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ondepended
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14 per
cent
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on
this
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source, which was the smallest figure compared to other nations. Nuclear
power
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,
however
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, was exploited only in
India
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and
Sweden
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, which
consituted
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constituted
4 per
cent
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and 44 per
cent
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden, power, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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