The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the percentage of three different
electricity
sources produced in four major countries from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
, while
Vietnam and India
produced considerably higher electricity
from fossil fuel
, Fix the agreement mistake
fuels
Sweden
and Morocco appeared to harness hydro
Correct your spelling
hydropower
power
as their main electricity
source. Only India
and Sweden
had electricity
produced from nuclear power
.
Among four
mentioned nations, Correct article usage
the four
India
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India's
electricity
depended mostly on fossil fuel, which accounted for over four fifths
. Meanwhile, Add a hyphen
four-fifths
Sweden
and Morocco used only 4 per cent
and 5 per cent
this
source, respectively, for Change preposition
of this
electricity
production.
Hydro
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Hydropower
power
was used mainly in Morocco, which made up 95 per cent
, followed by Sweden
, where over a
half Correct article usage
apply
electricity
production was responsible by Change preposition
of electricity
hydro
Correct your spelling
hydropower
power
, while
India
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India's
electricity
production depended
14 per Add the preposition
ondepended
cent
on this
source, which was the smallest figure compared to other nations.
Nuclear power
, however
, was exploited only in India
and Sweden
, which consituted
4 per Correct your spelling
constituted
cent
and 44 per cent
, respectively.Submitted by conheokun2005 on
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