It is believed that young people are more interested in international pop singers and movie stars then in history and historical people.why is this?

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Due to globalisation, many foreign pop musicians and celebrities are famous among the worldwide.

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, the young

people mostly

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people, mostly

follow them.

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, some argue that youngsters are not fond of our

history

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and they have not interested in to know about freedom fighters.

This

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essay will discuss both views and give their opinion.

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with, in technical era

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young

people mostly

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people, mostly

devoted to their hobbies

such

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as listen music

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watch movies and so on.

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thus

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Thus

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they have a dense interest towards international pop singers and movie stars.

because

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Because

they entertain youth via sing

different type

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a different type

of songs and act like a real

heroes

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hero

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secondly

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Secondly

, these celebrities are very popular among the youngster and they

also

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become a role model for them.

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, they live in

glamour world

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the glamour world

and they have a lot of fans following for their stylish looks, living in a luxurious lifestyle and they are trend settles so youth follow their footsteps. Eventually

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international celebrities are popular because of Paparazzi and technology.

everyday

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Every day

Everyday

they are seen at every home on television so people never forget their faces in their life. They are public figures and they host many shows like KBC and coffee with Karan that way they are popular stars in globally.

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teenager

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teen-agers

are not interested in our

history

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.They think it is a useless because

past

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the past

is not related to present.

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moreover

in addition

Moreover

, students who study science and biology subjects they have not required knowledge of

history

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Furthermore

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, some students are studying subjects like arts and literature they interested in

history

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juvenile

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the juvenile

a juvenile

is not interested in

historical person

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the historical person

because our

history

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have plethora of freedom fighters

show

to a very great extent or degree

they cannot remember all them. In conclusion,

history

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illustrates

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illustrated

our

past but

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past, but

sometime it is a boring for young people.

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, Juvenile

mostly admire

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mostly admires

from international celebrities and pop singers because they

provides

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provide

entertainment them.

Thu Oct 10 2019

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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307 words

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