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Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than expecting individuals to take responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

#governments #companies #work #damage #individuals #responsibility
Although
ordinary people
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the ordinary people
 in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 case are
cause
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the cause
 of pollution about
environment
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environmental
 destruction, the governments and huge institutions are responsible, too. In my opinion, the
second
 group
have
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has
 more effect on
environment
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the environment
 and they should step in and modify their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 to improve
situation
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the situation
. In spite of the reality that folks are the main cause of contaminating in some areas
such
 as beaches or streets, but depending on social background, there are special groups who clean their circumstances voluntarily and they negate the bad effects of villain people. I believe that governments and companies impose worse effects than individuals and they should cooperate to minimize harmful marginal effects. The governments should make new policy about Environmental activities to reduce its undesirable results on the
environment
 and encourage individuals and companies to save
environment
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the environment
.
Thus
, the governments and
corporates
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corporations
corporate
 should help persons to protect safe and clean
environment
. The governments through mayors can construct parks and green spaces to make beautiful scenery.
Likewise they
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Likewise, they
 could limit harmful activities
such
 as cut the trees to make new roads. Big companies should be banned to
don not
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do, not
do not
 release their waste material into
environment
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the environment
,
instead
 by Research and Development (R&D) discover new methods to recycle waste material into useful goods. Individuals,
also
, support the governments and take care of their surroundings, because safe
environment
 is
direct effect
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a direct effect
the direct effect
 on their healthiness. In conclusion, environmental change is related to any activity on behalf of individuals, governments, and companies. Every side can play its duty to protect the
environment
. To achieve
this
 all of the groups should collaborate to make a great condition to live.
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