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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years,
tourism
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 and the number of people travelling to the other countries has boomed as
global trend
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a global trend
.
However
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, it is
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 that
such
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tourism
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 forms cultural tensions
for
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of
 understanding.I completely disagree with
this
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 statement as in my opinion, international
tourism
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generate
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generates
culture
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 learning and acceptance. On the one hand, International travel is the possible
way
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 to learn the cultures and traditions of the different nations in the world and it is the possible
way
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 of build
bridge
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a bridge
bridges
 between other countries over the
global
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globe
.
when
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When
 people from different nations together they will know the various
raditions
an inherited pattern of thought or action
traditions
editions
 and gain the knowledge about languages, philosophies. In
fact
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fact, this
this
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 knowledge used to people
know
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knows
 the acceptance and built respect on different cultures.
For instance
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, when
forigen
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 people went to
asian
a native or inhabitant of Asia
Asian
 countries
theylearn
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they learn
 about distinct
culture
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 aspects
from
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of
 native and they got to know about various
cusines
the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared
cuisines
cousins
casinos
 and local
customes
money collected under a tariff
customs
customers
 which has developed a close bond between western and
estern
lying toward or situated in the east
eastern
Western
 people.
On the other hand
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, meeting new people while travelling is one of the great upside.
Wheather
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Whether
 it is small talking with your
seatment
a body of people who settle far from home but maintain ties with their homeland; inhabitants remain nationals of their home state but are not literally under the home state's system of government
settlement
sentiment
statement
 in local us or train and lively discussion at a local
resturents
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restaurant
restaurants
 and bar improved a social skills, If new situations tend to make an individual anxious, travelling is a sure
way
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 to take steps toward reducing that anxiety.
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, under
this
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 point of view,
tourism
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 has a strong positive impact on the humanity. To conclude, I mostly disagree with the view that travelling makes tension rather than
uderstanding
the cognitive condition of someone who understands
understanding
 between people from
differnet
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
culture
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.
Touris
a journey or route all the way around a particular place or area
Tours
Tourism
is
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are
 the best
way
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 of knowing the distinct
culture
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 and bonding the gap between the
culture
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.
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