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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent years,
tourism
 and the number of people travelling to the other countries has boomed as
global trend
Suggestion
a global trend
.
However
, it is
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 that
such
tourism
 forms cultural tensions
for
Suggestion
of
 understanding.I completely disagree with
this
 statement as in my opinion, international
tourism
generate
Suggestion
generates
culture
 learning and acceptance. On the one hand, International travel is the possible
way
 to learn the cultures and traditions of the different nations in the world and it is the possible
way
 of build
bridge
Suggestion
a bridge
bridges
 between other countries over the
global
Suggestion
globe
.
when
Suggestion
When
 people from different nations together they will know the various
raditions
an inherited pattern of thought or action
traditions
editions
 and gain the knowledge about languages, philosophies. In
fact
Accept comma addition
fact, this
this
 knowledge used to people
know
Suggestion
knows
 the acceptance and built respect on different cultures.
For instance
, when
forigen
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 people went to
asian
a native or inhabitant of Asia
Asian
 countries
theylearn
Suggestion
they learn
 about distinct
culture
 aspects
from
Suggestion
of
 native and they got to know about various
cusines
the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared
cuisines
cousins
casinos
 and local
customes
money collected under a tariff
customs
customers
 which has developed a close bond between western and
estern
lying toward or situated in the east
eastern
Western
 people.
On the other hand
, meeting new people while travelling is one of the great upside.
Wheather
Suggestion
Whether
 it is small talking with your
seatment
a body of people who settle far from home but maintain ties with their homeland; inhabitants remain nationals of their home state but are not literally under the home state's system of government
settlement
sentiment
statement
 in local us or train and lively discussion at a local
resturents
Suggestion
restaurant
restaurants
 and bar improved a social skills, If new situations tend to make an individual anxious, travelling is a sure
way
 to take steps toward reducing that anxiety.
Therefore
, under
this
 point of view,
tourism
 has a strong positive impact on the humanity. To conclude, I mostly disagree with the view that travelling makes tension rather than
uderstanding
the cognitive condition of someone who understands
understanding
 between people from
differnet
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
culture
.
Touris
a journey or route all the way around a particular place or area
Tours
Tourism
is
Suggestion
are
 the best
way
 of knowing the distinct
culture
 and bonding the gap between the
culture
.
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