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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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it
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It
 is correct that information technology
now play
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now plays
 an important role in our daily activities.
though
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Though
 it has lots of
advantages but
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advantages, but
 we can see that IT outweigh the disadvantages too.
this
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This
 essay will
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 how
this
 field dominates
humans
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human
human's
 life.
Firstly
, at home, we are using lots of facilities through it. Online banking
for
instance which
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instance, which
 can aim us to save
time
 and energy.
or
introduces an alternative
Or
 if we buy some clothes or some household materials,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 we can use online shopping.
these
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These
 are possible only through IT.
Secondly
,
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,
meanwhile
,
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,
people get more leisure
time
 than before by using IT, they
also
 would fill their free
time
 with it as well.
For example
 kids are mostly busy with playing video games. Even
,
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,
the adults
also
 pass their
time
 off by chatting with another.
More over
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
in work field
also
,
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,
IT dominates everyone. As
,
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,
for instance
,
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,
in offices, all important data has to be stored
in
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on
 cutting-
adge
the boundary of a surface
edge
 devices
.
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.
 Using the internet
,
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,
everyone can have access the information that they seek for
anytime
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any time
.
the
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The
 information technology is everywhere in homes, offices, public spaces and devices
,
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,
so it has a great impact
in
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on
 our life.

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