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Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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An increasing number of vehicles lead to traffic congestion, which is faced by the most of the people. People have different solutions to alleviate
this
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 issue. Some think that the best way is to build and improve railways, while others believe that, making roads wider can only the solution
to
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To
 overcome the problem. So, from both of these, for which the government should spend money, is the debatable issue.
This
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 essay discusses both views and arrives at its own view at the end. On the one hand, it is the fact that trains are bigger than any other road transportation vehicles.
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, it facilitates a thousand of people at a time, which eventually, reduces the use of private auto-mobiles on roads and makes the traffic less stressful.
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, it is surveyed that, Mumbai local trains are facilitating more than a billion locals everyday, to commute across the city.
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, railway systems and subway lines are mostly
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 the outskirts of the city, which makes the inner road congestion-free.
On the other hand
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, constructing wider roads is considered as the effective solution by many. As, it is commonly seen that most locals use roads, bigger roads certainly provide them flexibility to drive safely.
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, making roads wider demands more lands and the scarcity of the land cannot be overlooked. More roads without space, makes the situation more
worsen
(comparative of 'bad') inferior to another in quality or condition or desirability
worse
 than good. To conclude, according to me, the government should spend money in creating new railway and subway tracks, as it serves more people.
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, it is the responsibility of the government to understand
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the necessities
 of citizens and use sources and the funds effectively according to that.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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