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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating too regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, growing population, especially youth, is eating
junk
food
 on a regular basis. It can lead to various health problems. Some people are of the opinion that the only way to solve
this
 problem is to ban it.
This
 essay will talk about why
this
 is not a viable solution according to me. Let us understand the reason, why more number of people are opting for
junk
food
. Fast
food
, the name itself indicates it is not only available very quickly, but
also
 cheap.
For instance
, in metro cities, where people are working almost throughout the day, they tend to eat fast
food
 to save their precious time and money. Apart from
this
, the younger generation of the country tends to follow the Western culture,
junk
food
 chains like Mc Donald’s being one of them. Consuming
such
junk
food
 on a daily basis will lead to different health problems as they contain
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of preservatives and fats. It can mainly cause a person to become overweight leading to issues like obesity, high cholesterol levels, etc. According to me, banning anything leads to the illegal selling of the banned item. If fast
food
 is banned it will cause people to buy them at higher costs maybe illegally.
Instead
, health awareness must be done about eating healthy
food
 rather than fast
food
. To conclude, I do not completely agree that fast
food
 should be banned to avoid its consumption on a large scale. In my opinion, we should rather focus on the advantages of eating healthy
food
 and promote the same on a large scale.

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