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Some people think that public health within a country can be improved by government making laws regarding nutritious food. Others however think that health is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #health #country #government #laws #food #matter #choice #responsibility
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Some people think that
health
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 is a great issue that needs to be
improved but
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improved, but
 others
on the other hand
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feel
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feels
 it is their
choice
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 and no one can pressurize anyone for doing
some thing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
.
This
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 essay would
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 both views in the below paragraph. Those who consider that by
laws
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the laws
 of the
government
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health
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 issues can be improved is quite a good way.
Government
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 can make different laws as everyone has to obey the
rules but
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rules, but
 it can
also
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 lead towards freedom of people.
Government
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 can add heavy taxes on junk
food
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 so that in day to day life people cannot have the unhealthy
food
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. Availability of low quality
food
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 items should be banned
on
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in
 the stores and
this
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 can be only done by the
government
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.
Although
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 healthy
food
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 is a great concern for
everyone but
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everyone, but
 it all depends upon persons
choice
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. No matter how many laws are passed and how strongly
government
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 monitors on the products which are being sold if a person
himself
objective male pronoun, used to refer to a male human or animal
he
 does not follow the healthy diet and lifestyle he will surely suffer from the diseases and
health
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 related issues. The
choice
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 of the person greatly affects on the overall conditions. By making laws one cannot force anyone to change their eating habits.
Therefore
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, to aware public,
government
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 can arrange seminars in
hospitals for
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hospitals, for
 new parents and in schools for children so that they are trained well enough and by their own
choice
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 they choose to have
good lifestyle
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a good lifestyle
. To conclude, people should
themselves
people in general
they
 choose a healthy and better lifestyle while
government
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 should ensure the good quality of products to be sold
on
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in
at
 the stores. With the initiative of both public
health
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 within the country can be improved.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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