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Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gym or sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in so doing. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Maintaining a healthy and fit body is more important these days because of stressful jobs and sitting before a computer screen for hours. Some companies offer their
staff
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 free membership of the
gym
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 or sports club that
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 will make them healthier. While other employers see no advantages through that subsidy. In
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 essay, I will discuss about both sides of the argument and give my opinion.
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, many MNC companies offer their
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 with many facilities to make their
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 free from stress from their daily
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.
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, they
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 offer event tickets or other club membership to make them effective at
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.
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, joining in the
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 can help employees to be fit and
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 helps to build better relations with other colleagues. So, it is important to join a club or the
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 to be healthier.
On the other hand
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, the people who already joined in the
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 and other clubs will see no benefit by
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 subsidy. Apart from that, the people will get no time to spend with their family and to
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 on their passion.
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,
staff
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 who joined in the
gym
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 will get less time for their personal
work
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 as well for their family members. That mean
staff
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 usually spends 8 hours in their office, 8 hours of sleep and remaining time in their other works. So, some employers see no benefit of subsidized membership. In conclusion, by the above aforementioned points majority of the employers get benefited from those schemes. In my humble opinion, every people who are working in those companies should utilize
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 scheme to make their life healthier and more fit.

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