Some people think that only staff who worked in a company for a long time should be promoted to a higher position. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nevertheless
, I believe performance is just as important as the length of service when it comes to promotion eligibility. Candidates with high performance level often own extensive relevant experience and technical skills, which are fundamental to the survival and sustainability of a company in the long run.
Accordingly
, offering those candidates with higher positions will
inarguably
benefit the company in terms of boosting the overall employee morale—motivating those junior and new employees to achieve higher performance in their current positions.
For example
, in the highly competitive computer engineering industry, a performance-driven promotion rewards and elevates those lower-ranking employees who are capable of delivering extraordinary innovations.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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