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Some people believe that employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but they should be concerned about the quality at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people hold that there is no need for employers to focus on their workers’
dress
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. It is the
quality
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 of
work
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 that should be worth attention.
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, I claim that both
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 and
quality
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 of the
work
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 should be highlighted. The proponents agree that if regulations are set in a bid to manage
employees’
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the employees’ dress
dress
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 or if employees are all required to be dressed in the uniforms, their working enthusiasm may be negatively influenced as they were not given enough freedom to demonstrate their personal styles, they may feel their boss interference too much about their daily working life,
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 impact on the
quality
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 of the
work
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. In
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 circumstance, it is employees’ working
quality
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 rather than the
dress
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 that should be concerned about.
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, when we turn to the other side of the argument, there are some points in
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promote over another
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 of that the employees’
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also
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 plays an important role in the operation of the company.
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 and foremost, some workers are required to
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 uniforms because it represents the corporate image, especially in some important occasions where employers had to have face-to-face communication with those workers, uniforms make it easy for customers to identify them.
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, compared with an awful
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, a stylish
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 can ensure a pleasant working atmosphere for employees because people are visual animals,
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 increasing the working efficiency. In conclusion, I believe that both both employees’
dress
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 and the
quality
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 of the
work
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 should be concerned about because they are important to the running of the whole company.
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