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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Once a strange and unfamiliar part of human nutrition,
food
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 additives have now turned into an inseparable part of our daily
diets
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diet
. While there are some advantages for using those chemicals in
food
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 production, I would argue that they are more likely to have a harmful effect on human
health
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. On the one hand, using preservation chemicals decreases the chance of
food
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 spoilage in a short
period which
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period, which
 is an enormous assist in
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food industry
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the food industry
.
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, the ability to keep the
food
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 unspoiled for a long time not only makes the transport of it to any part of the world possible, but it
also
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 increases the availability of several types of
food
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 in all seasons.
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,
although
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 it is true that chemicals may be dangerous to people’s
health
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, not all additives are harmful. There are several additives which are added to
food
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 so as to enrich the nutrients ranging from various types of vitamins to minerals. Despite the mentioned arguments, I believe that the harm and danger
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 caused by
food
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 chemicals outweighs their benefits. The
food
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 which is produced by additives has normally been kept for long and
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 has lost a noticeable amount of
is
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 nutrients, as well as appearance and aroma.
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, it would neither have a toothsome taste nor a nutritional value. A more critical aspect of using chemicals in
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 would be the potential danger
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to
health
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. Several researchers have proved the direct impact of some additives on the increasing risk of dangerous diseases
such
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 as cancer.
This
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 would become more concerning to know that
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 chemicals had been used for several years before they were recognised as harmful to
health
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.
This
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 could be the same for several other additives and
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 it seems crucial to reconsider the unlimited use of
food
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 preservatives and chemicals immediately. In conclusion, all the
food
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 additives could be beneficial to some extent
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 as either increasing durability or
nutritionizing
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food
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 by adding vitamins, I believe that the possible danger of making people vulnerable to a deadly disease, namely cancer, as well as loss of
organoleptic
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 and nutritional properties of
food
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far outweigh
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far outweighs
 the advantages and
therefore
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 the use of
such
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 chemicals out to be reconsidered.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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