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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, people can buy the same products anywhere around the globe.
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, it seems that countries are becoming more and more similar. While some people may believe
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 as a positive effect, I think
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. There are some obvious advantages of
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 kind of development.
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, if people can buy the same goods anywhere, it implies mass production. With mass production, the cost of the products can reduce dramatically.
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, people can own similar items with much lower price.
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, some negative impact should
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 be taken into consideration. Often these kinds of things are not produced locally,
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 the carbon footprints of these items are likely to be higher. Another impact may be the decrease in cultural diversity, as countries all around the world are becoming alike. The fall of cultural diversity could
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 affect cultural identity, Children of a country will be less likely to know their own culture, because the things they have encountered during childhood are foreign. Eventually, some already rare or endanger cultures might face the fate of extinction. As cultural diversity declines, there will
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 be an inevitable damage to the tourism industry. When most countries are almost identical, people will certainly find travelling to another country less thrilling.
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, they will spend less money for sightseeing in foreign countries. In conclusion, I personally believe globalisation definitely has a positive effect.
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, if it starts to put other culture at risk, people should think twice before embracing it. Governments as well should start protecting their own unique culture, with a limited extent of globalisation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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