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Many people think that important things in life are mostly free or can’t be bought. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

Most of the people believe that the most important things in
life
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 are free and doesn'
t
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 cost anything at all.
Most important thing
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The most important thing
Most important things
 in
life
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 is happiness and there is saying that 'It takes nothing to be happy'
.
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 I agree to
this
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, and in
this
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 essay I will illustrate my opinion in
detailed manner
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a detailed manner
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To begin
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 with, when we talk about
most important
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more important
 things in
life
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, there are few things that come
in
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into
 our minds. Those are health, hobbies, family, friends, etc. When we ponder over these things, we come to know that these things are absolutely free and can'
t
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 be bought by anything. Family members are the
first
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 people we meet after birth and they are with us till death. Healthy family relations depend on trust, truth and helping hands. We can'
t
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 buy family by any amount of
money
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. Same goes for good and real friends. It takes nothing to be loyal and real with our friends and they are with us in many situations including happy and sad moments.
For
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instance I
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instance, I
 have realized the worth of friends and family member and they are my biggest assets. I can count on them and the best part is that I have these people in my
life
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 without having spent any
money
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.
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 to the list, we can consider hobbies and health equally important and absolutely free. We get immense happiness when we are busy in doing what we like to do.
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, my nephew likes to play cricket with his friend very much. He
also
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 enjoys drawing and painting. We never spent any amount of
money
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 for him to enjoy these hobbies. Health is another vital aspect of
life
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 and maintaining
fit body
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a fit body
 and
stressfree
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stress free
 mind is paramount. Surprisingly,
this
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 can be achieved free of cost.
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, I jog daily to keep my body fit. I meditate to maintain peace of mind. Having considered many important aspects of
life
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 and examples, I firmly believe that paramount things in our
life
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 are free and
can'
can not
cannot
t
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 be bought by
money
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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