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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, others think there other better way. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is true that by reducing
maximum speed
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the maximum speed limit
limit
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 on
vechicles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
, the risk of accidents can be minimised. On
other hand
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the other hand
, there are other better ways of
road
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.
This
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 essay agrees with the fact that there are better ways for
road
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safety
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 rather than reducing the speed
limit
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. On one side, reducing speed
limit
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 can improve
road
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safety
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 to a certain extent.
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, the reduced speed
limit
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 makes
driver
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the driver
drivers
a driver
 more aware of the situation and gives more reaction time during
accident
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an accident
the accident
accidents
. A small extend in the reaction time can be a life saving. But the reduced maximum speed
limit
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 in highways makes the traffic more slow and make more
inconvinience
an inconvenient discomfort
inconvenience
inconveniences
inconvenienced
. For
intance
an occurrence of something
instance
, the reduced speed
limit
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 nearby hospitals and schools
is
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are
 a good idea. On another side, there are better ways for
road
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safety
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 without reducing speed
limit
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 due improvement of sensors and braking technology.
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, dawn of AI and machine learning has provided better algorithms which can predict accidents and
avaoid
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
 negligence of
driver
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the driver
drivers
.
For example
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, in autonomous
vechicles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
, better sensor technology combines with Artificial
technlogy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 uses addition
safety
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 measures
such
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 air bags, disc braking, predictive algorithms and
pripheral
on or near an edge or constituting an outer boundary; the outer area
peripheral
 visual (LIDAR) technology. In conclusion,
although
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 reducing
maximum speed
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the maximum speed limit
limit
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 is helpful to a certain extent,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that there are better
techlogies
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technologies
 which not only increase
road
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safety
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 but
also
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 increase the speed of the vehicle. It is most important to have
safety
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 along with the speed.

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